Monday, January 2, 2012

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As we begin the new semester, I want to continue our focus here on improving our writing. By Friday, I want you to leave a comment describing an imaginary package that you have received. Describe what the package looks like and what it contains. Use lots of details including many descriptive adjectives. Be complete!

40 comments:

  1. I stood at the doorstep where I had found the package. Normally packages were just wrapped in plain brown paper, but this one had elegant designs covering it. I saw some of the designs were flowers and some were animals. A pretty blue ribbon was tied tightly all around the package ending with a curled bow.
    I took the the strange gift to the living room where I began to unwrap it. It felt like hours, trying to hack away at the wrapping paper and ribbon. Finally after at least three hours I looked at a green box. Taking of the cover I peered inside.
    Inside was a small puppy barely up to my knee. I wondered who had sent it and how it had not moved at all. Then I noticed small, tiny holes poked in the paper and the box. I smiled at the puppy and guided it to its new home.

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  2. I awoke to see a small present under the ooh how I was filled with glee. I crept over and saw the sight and went silent all through the night. We came to just in time to see Mr. Nicholas put the last present under the tree ooh how I was filled with glee. We open the small present elagent with with a bow we open and saw a litte to maw. We wondered and shifed thinking this must be wrong the we realized we were dumb as a thong. and realizy or mommy is gone. What did they get for Cristmas the caught the spirit And gave a happy sigh.

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  3. One day, I was taking a walk in the beautiful park. I stopped when I noticed that I hit something. I looked down, and there was a pretty box! It was bright blue with neon green polka dots. It also had a magnificent, pink ribbon. I was astonished. I didn't know what to do. I had to open it. It was too good to just pass up. Inside, there was a luminous yellow scarf. I looked at the tag, and it said it was hand-stitched. I decided to take it home, and it has been my favorite scarf since.

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  4. I got an imaginary package about 2ft. tall in a brown UPS box. I didn't no who it was for so I looked and looked and till I found in tiny print to Hunter Murray. So I took it up stairs ,but it weighed a ton. Eventually I got it up stairs. I opened it ,but it had a lot of pink foam peanuts. Then I found what I got it was a jet pack.

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  5. There I stood looking at a box on my door step. The box had a purple star on it and lots of colorful shapes on it. It read BJ Hill on the splashing red name tag. I opened it up. It had a lot candy in it chochlate, Jolyranchers and more. The end

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  6. If a package came to my house it look like a huge box. It would have a magnifying glass print on the top to make it look all detective like. The box would be heavy too.Only four things are in there. People will think it's dull on the outside, but it's cool on the inside. It would contain a magnifying glass,pair of gloves(fingerproof),computer laptop,and fingerprint device.The magnifying glass will help me detect certain stuff. The magnifying glass has a green layer on the outside and a little yellow. The stem of it would be turquoise with a little bit of ocean blue.

    The pair of gloves would help me investigate stuff. These gloves help me pick up shards of tiny glass. These gloves are also fingerproof so that no sign of fingerprints show. The gloves would be a sea foam green color.Very dark but vibrant

    This computer will help to analyze my data of important things. With that that fingerprint device I'll be able to track everything. The computer will also be green like everything else. The computer will have stripes,little ribbons,and an ice skate on it.

    The fingerprinting device helps me fingerprints. If I were a detective this would be important tracking who did the crime or something. So a detective would find evidence and write important facts to solve.The fingerprint device is a deep dark gray too.

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  7. I was at my house on the computer and I heard the doorbell rang. I thought it was my friend because she told me that she was coming over. When I opened the door there was a very starnge looking package it was the size of my door.So I opened it and it was all brown and old and there was very little yellowish brown spots and it had a really red ribbon like the color of blood and on the middle of it it had a H so i brought it and i opened it I was so shocked what was in! It was a time machine it was all black and it had stars on them and inside was all buttons. So i got in the time machine and i pressed the button the was all pink and blue and it brought me to this old timey dance so i pressed home. I woke up in my room and it was 12:00 o'clock in the morning! So i went back to sleep but the time machine was still there waiting for me to go back in it.

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  8. Today, I got a package raped in bright shiny red paper with a sparkly gold bow. It was four by four by four feet and three pounds. Ripping into the box I stared at odd black thing it was a treasurer chest filled with shiny gold doubloons!

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  9. On Tuesday January 4, 1012 a mysterious brown box appeared on my porch addressed to: LEE TALLENT. The box was a tan small box that wasn't very heavy. It still had the sticky adhesive stuff from someone removing the return address.
    At first I tried opening it but i wouldn't budge I tried everything I could but nothing worked. Finally I gave up and threw it on the floor and the top flap came up. I can't believe it worked.
    I opened it very slowly and what i saw was a super computer that could take me to the future or the past. It could even talk and turn into a robot. in robot form it was very sleek and a shiny chrome color. Me and my new robot, Wyatt, blasted off into space.
    THE END

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  10. Today I got a brown package at my door when I opened it up and I found 4 video games. The first one was called red dead undead nightmare. The second one was Madden 12. The therd one was Nascar the game 2011. The last one was call of duty MW3

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  11. When I came home there was a package that had my name on it. I wondered what it was. When I opened it, I was surprised about what was in it. It was a magazine that I have been wanting for over a year!!!! It was the Discovery Girls Best of 2011. That was at least three times as big!

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  12. Today, I got a package that sat at my front door. It was blue with my name on it and wasn't very heavy. When I opened it I found a beautiful pearl necklace and four tickets to wherever I wanted to go in the world! The tickets looked a little bit like the tickets from the Polar Express. They were gold with fancy black print. It was what I wanted for a long time. I was so surprised and astounded!

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  13. When I was playing outside I saw this big and spiritcual package it was so big that three people could fit in it! The box had a special designed name on it,it saidddddd KAMIYAH MENIFEE! I was so excited so I called my family to come here and all of a sudden they came running threw the house. They were happy for some suspicious reason. It was like they knew what it was. Anyway I started open it and when I finished I saw three people they looked like three characters that I always wanted to see. Guess one had a really big scar the other smart and very intelligent last one illiterate. Your right best movie stars Harry

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  14. On January 5, 2012 I recived a package at my door. It was a glistened golden package with a red velvet ribbon tied at the top
    When I opened it up it had a video game called Skyrim and 50 dollars laying in the bottom of the glistened golden package.

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  15. The doorbell rang one late afternoon and went to answer it, but all I found was a small package. It was the color red with a silver ribbon and the tag on it said: To Hunter Ruff. I opened the package and found a small puppy I didn't know what to name her, and after a while I named her Darby. She was a playful little puppy, and also really cute too! She got along with my other dogs and grew up to be a big and playful dog. And that's what I found in my package.

    THE END

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  16. One sunny January day, I was walking the dogs around the neighborhood and that is when I saw it. It was a brown package with pink ribbon, and the name MARY GRACE GRAVES!!! I was very exited and opened quickly. All of the sudden all colors of every kind red, green, blue, yellow it was really beautiful...But then... nothing. Next I heard a sharp squeak behind me. I turned around and the cutest littlest fluffiest bunny was right there, and it was mine! Me and fluffers are living happily ever after!!1

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  17. One day I received a package when I never ordered it. It was a square shiny red box. I went inside and sat on the couch. I started to open it then I saw a sign on the bottom. It said, in big giant letters,Fragile. So I opened it very gently and inside was, a boat made out of wood. I didn't think that it was going to be a boat. I had no clue what to do with it. I guess that I'll never know what to do with it.

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  18. I was in the backyard then the UPS guy came to the front door. Then after he left I went to the front door and it was so huge it could`t fit in my house. So we pushed it into the backyard. Then I saw famous paintings on the side so we went to go open it then I thought were these purloined paintings no Shurley not then I looked inside and all the painters that panted them.
    THE END

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  19. One sunny Sunday I received a gigantic boring brown package.The package was bigger then a blue whale, it would make the tallest building in the world seem tiny. It could fit 40 humongous elephants in it and still have enough space for an ocean and 20 big blue whales. What I found when I opened it was tiny apple seed.

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  20. I was going outside about to ride my bike, and there on my porch was a package. It was a orange, big, rectangle, solid package.A note was in the package and said unknown species it never grows. The handwriting was very horrible too. With that letter a little animal was in it and that animal was an animal I had never seen before. It looked like a puppy but had cat ears, nose, mouth, and whiskers. It was very soft and beautiful, it had white creamy fur which was very soft with chocolate spots and a chocolate face too. I thought and thought and thought and said, " I think I should keep it and I did and named it, chocolate and cream."

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  21. one day while I Was playing with my r/c helicopter my mom interrupted me and said I had a package. She also said that there was no name from the sender. I didn't know what was in it so I was very eager to open it.
    Once I opened it it reminded me of what my sister was studying. It was called an imaginary number.The only thing it had in common was that the gift I received didn't exist. I opened a box that had nothing in it.
    THE END

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  22. Today I got a big package. It was all red and black stripes with a big white bow. It was very over weight,so I pick it up and walked in big blue house. Wow! It was a million dollars now I can buy what ever I want. I'll be so great full.THE END

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  23. My package arrived on my 12th birthday. It was left on my front porch. The wrapping paper was aqua with gold stars. The sun shining on the gold stars made them come alive! The ribbon was as soft as silk and was wrapped firm and beautiful around my secret package. It contained a doll with medium lenth of hair golden brown in color. Her hair was as soft as chenille to the touch. Her eyes glistened and sparkled as if trying to talk to me. Her mouth was as red as a cherry , her skin was as tan as the sand. My doll was a great surprise to have gotten in my beautiful, huge package.

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  24. When I recieved my package, I was astounded that someone had sent me a package. When I looked at the bottom of the package, I found a nametag! It read: To Lee. From Lebron James. I wondered what it could be. The wrapping looked expensive, so expensive that I didn't want to tear it open. The paper was so expensive, it looked like it was gold that had been just mined out of a mine. The box was shaped like a regular cube box. I was thinking, is this really from Lebron James, or is it just one of my friends faking me out? Then I realized it wouldn't shake! I had to open it, I opened it and I saw something that would be a trophy to me forever. I saw the winning game ball of the 2011 NBA Championship. There were also three other things that were absolutely outstanding, three season tickets to all the Heat basketball games! My Mom, my Dad,and I were all going to have a great time.Then at our first game we went to we found out it was just a prank from my friends[who are no longer my friends now!]

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  25. I received a special package on a very snowy night. I heard a loud thump against the door. I went to the door to see what was making the noise. It was a package. The package was painted orange with white stripes in the middle of the box. On top of the box, there was a card. The card said: To Connor, From Tim Tebow. I felt surprised when I saw that. I brought the package inside and put it on my bedroom floor. When I opened it I saw a gold football that had Tim Tebow's autograph on it. I was shocked that it was for me! I was so happy. I can't wait to show my friends.

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  26. one day I was swinging with my friend. We swung for a very long time. The I had to go home. When I was walking home. There was a package address to me. It was very small package. It was wrapped beautifully. When I opened it I could not believe my eyes. It was 24 carrot necklace with charms. There were three charms. The cool thing is that they were my hobbies. The first one was a silver cupcake with blue studs around it. The cupcake stands for that I like to bake. The next one was a silver shovel with pink studs on the handle. It stands for that I like to do gardening. The last one was a silver cat with a green bow tie. Then I put the necklace back in it's box, and started looking around the box to see who gave it to me. It said nothing. So I gave up. Then I showed it to my mom. She said"I don't know who gave it to you, but you are pretty lucky".

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  27. I woke to a heavy pressure small my feet something small but when I woke I looked down and saw a very small square object wrapped in gold and sealed with a blue ribbon. Well if you see something like that you can't just let it sit there and do nothing so I opened the gift and it was a video game. At first I went "sweet" and played it a few times and stopped not relizing the true value of the game.A few months later I was watching TV and I saw this ad for this game and it looked great I was thinking about getting it but something felt very firmiler about the game.One month later I Iooked at my games and saw the game that was on TV was the exact game as I got in my package.After that I called all of my friends my crazy tale.

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  28. One day when I woke up from the night I saw a package next to my bed! It was wrapped in beautiful gold wrapping paper with jem cats and dogs. I thought for a moment of who just might give me this package? But then I said to myself JUST OPEN IT!!! And when I did it was beautiful it was a jem encrusted dog collar for my puppy then a 1,000,000 dollar Itunes giftcard and a legendary 2,000,000 dollar bill!!! When I told my friends they were astonished!!!!

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  29. One morning our doorbell rang and I ran to see who it was. It was a FedEx person. There was a package on the porch. It was very small, flat, flexible and easily consealed. On the package it said "Hope you have fun". It was very weird that it would say that. The package said it was from someone that I would meet in the next few days. The package was just plain yellow like all of the other FedEx packages but I was still excited that I had got a package. I hurried to tell my Mom that I got a package. She said to open it, so I did. When I opened the package, there was only a folded piece of paper. I thought it was just a prank when I saw what it was. It was a ticket to be on the show "Are you smarter than a fifth grader." When I looked at the date the show was on, it was tomorrow so I went to tell my brother I was going to be on a tv show.

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  30. One day I received a package that was delivered to my front door. It was a big, heavy, brown cardboard box. It felt like a big brick. Inside the box was an old, green, leather spell book. In the bottom of the box was a small key in a little velvet bag. The book’s leather cover had cracks and a title called Spells that looked like it was written in gold. The texture was rough. The book had golden ruffles on its spine and a silver lock on the cover. The book smelled decayed. Inside, there were lots of thick brittle pages! They looked so old that I could have peeled the typing right off. The typing on the pages was small and ancient. The book looked so mysterious and exciting that I couldn’t wait to start reading!

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  31. When I was playing outside,I saw a package.It was big and square, it had stripes of colors that was blue, green,and pink.It had my name written in big letters.I brought it in the house, and called for parents and they came racing through the house like a bunch of wild animals.Therefore I started unwrapping the box,and when I finished unwrapping the box their it was the whole series of Harry Potter. two of seven even though it wasn't the toy I was still excited to have the Harry Potter books,because I only have the movies.there was also something in the book,and it was the watches I always wanted,and all of them I was jumping up ^and _. Then I wondered where it came from but who ever it was they are pretty full of love.

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  32. I was watching TV when the doorbell rang like a horn. I raced to the door, threw it open, and there was a gigantic wide rectangular orange package sitting on the front porch. I looked at it for what seemed like an hour. I managed to pull the heavy package inside. With no regrets I tore it open and in the package was a BBgun with long ranged scope. I don't know who sent it but with no doubt I will enjoy shotting it. Thank to whoever sent it.

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  33. In the late afternoon I was watching TV when i heard a mysterious knocking on the door. That when I jumped off the couch and ran to the door to open it for whoever knocked on the door but when I got to the door no one was there I looked all around but I didn't find anything,and right when I was going to close the door I caught a glimpse of a beautifully wrapped shiny gold package with a beautiful bow that was red on the very tip top of the square package. There was a little card on the package, but when I opened it it had my name on it in bold,elegant hand writting but on the part where it said from no one signed it. I was so excited I tore off the beautifull bow,and paper and looked inside. On the inside was a beautifully pearl necklace that glimmered in the light. It was so beautifull I put it on instantley,and when I did I felt so beautifull and special that someone went through the trouble of buying me a present. From that day forward I have learned to appreciate the little things in life because they can make you feel special inside and just becasu eits little it can help you go a far far way.

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  34. One day while I was on Christmas break a big brown truck stopped in front of my newly decorated house. I heard the short ding dong of the doorbell so I peared through the blinds. Then I saw what was a small tightly sealed colorful box. I could tell the object inside must have been large from the bulging corners. I slowly pulled the door open and reached for the package. However, it was so heavy my hand slipped. I tried again with both hands and this time was able to get it into the foyer of the house. I tore the tape from the ripped corner and it was then that I saw a huge new scratch free iphone 8 with no expensive monthly fee. It was the best delivery I have ever recieved. I don't know what wonderful caring person shipped that gift to me but I was estatic!

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  35. On a dark and snowy winter afternoon my Mom told me to go get the mail. About that time the door bell rang. It was the UPS guy. We waited till he left and I went outside to see what it was. It was a strange looking package. I have never seen the address befor so, I took it inside and gave it to my Mom and said, "Have you ever seen this address before"? She said "no" than I looked for who it was addressed to and it said my name. There was a strange sound comming from the box. The noise sounded like MMMMMM. I was very eager to open it up. I did and it was furry and... ALIVE. It was a puppy. I was so excited I called all my friends and said I got a puppy. There was still one questione to be answered who was it from next we get a phone call from the same address. We answered it... It was from the Queen of England. We gave her great gratatude.

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  36. This morning I got the biggest package I have ever seen. It looked like something was trying to get out but that was silly. The box was very large and had every color on it, but changed to. I read the name and it was for me. The box was radiated power I wanted to open it so bad. then it opened all by itself and pure fun was inside!

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  37. One day I was walking my dog and I happened to see a blue jay, my favorite bird. Just then I tripped and fell into a ditch, hitting my head on a blue chest with the initials D. B. on the top. I was astonished because there was a key taped to the chest and a button, so I pressed it. The next thing I know I'm listening to a song! It sang "Merry Christmas, Merry Christmas, Merry Christmas to you, Drake, from zzeeerrp". It had short-circuited before I could hear who it was from. I thought to myself, "Wow, it said my name!" It was crazy how it found me and I started thinking "was it really meant for me or another Drake?" So I checked the phone book to see who it might be meant for if not me, but then I thought I was being crazy because who would have there name in a phone book as a kid? All of the excitement of this mystery had made me so tired so I just went home for a nap. THE END!

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  38. I arrived home from school on a Friday afternoon and then I saw on my doorstep a package. When I got yo the door I picked up the package and took it inside. It was a package of many colors. It had all the colors you could imagine. It was green, yellow, red, blue, purple, orange, and any color you could imagine! I looked to see who it was from, but there was no tag and and there was nothing inside it either. I did not know how to figure out the mystery so I started my homework.

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